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Old 01-05-2009, 05:44 AM
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Fable 2 Fanfic (Yeah im going their)
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Kendra looked around from her position near the bandit camp. She could see the poor villagers crying some even trying to break the strong metal bars but it would be no use, the bars where made from the strongest metal that the people of Albion had found. She drew her rifle from her back and took aim at one of the bandits. A loud noise and the bandit screamed, his hand which just happened to be holding the keys flew off and into the nearby cage and the villagers stunned for a moment realized that the keys where on the floor of the cage. Kendra took aim at the bandits with the gun and promply shot them. The bandits finally had figured where Kendra was hiding and charged at her. She hurled a couple of fireballs at the bandit having ran out of ammunition earlier, most of the fireballs missed but on hit a bandit and he went down but there were still several bandits left and they were still charging so left with no choice but to draw her sword. She only planned to hold off the bandits long enough so that villagers could get far enough so that the bandits would leave them alone. The swirling melee continued for several minutes. Then all of a sudden a powerful force radiated from Kendra and the bandits were sent sprawling along the ground. Kendra quickly picked up her gun and ran far away from the camp. Once she caught up with the villagers she offered to walk them to Bowerstone where they could hire a coach to their town. They agreed and she acted as their escort for the rest of the journey. They arrived at Bowerstone just as the day was ending what a day she thought and she still had to go hunt down Lucien in the Spire. After using her sizable fortune to book the villagers a passage to Oakfield she went to the tavern to book a room but first she needed a drink.

Several Hours later


Kendra stumbled up the stairs with a man who offered to help her up after she vomitted on the bar. She kept trying to get him to sleep with her but he kept refusing. Once he got Kendra to the room she collapsed on the bed ans started snoring the man simply laughed and went back down stairs to get more drinks.

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"OW!" Kendra yelled scaring a person walking by the door over the rails and onto a table downstairs. Kendra was cradling her head from the pain "oooo maybe I shoulden't have drunk so much" she kept saying to herself. She tried her age old method of clearing her hangover, Go fire her gun near her ear.
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Old 07-05-2009, 06:17 PM
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I liked it. ^_^

Simple and action-oriented, you outline quite well the "do whatever you like" feel of the Fable games. Your grammar and sentence structure could be improved, but it's not terrible, and I would have liked to have seen a bit more detail in some places (describing the environment and the fireball burning the bandit to a crispy mess would have been delightful ).

Overall, I would like to read more about Kendra's exploits and see you describe her as a person, though this first installment does hint at her personality. Good work!
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Old 07-07-2009, 02:35 AM
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Yeah i wasn't feeling the best when i did this and it was one of my first posts I'd actually forgotten all about it and like i said i was high probably. (on life not drugs)
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Old 07-28-2009, 10:17 AM
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I liked it too, wonder if that guy from the bar will show up again, most guys i know wouldnt have turned her down..
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